Notice

I removed the page where I had one of my writings because I fear that it may not be the best example for other writers, as I committed many crimes against writing, the effects of which I am afraid have crippled the enjoyment of it's readers.

Writing Rule Number 7

To be a good writer you need to be able to add detail to your story, the amount differing with audience.
For example, if your writing a book intended for a middle-school-aged audience, then it probably would not be considered a good book if it was full of paragraph long descriptions, as they tend to bore younger audiences.